Santiago is the capital city of Chile, a place where you find all the financial world of the country. The principal activities in this city are the financial activities, you can find the headquarters, and the tourism also is developed here.
Santiago has an inefficient public transport. The buses
collapse in the pick hours, because many people return to their homes and the
subway also. In the winter, with the rain, the subway suffers floods. For being
a capital city, the people can work there, but the stress is too bigger that
the people lose the tolerance and becomes aggressive. In the travels to the
work/house, their faces seem angry or disgusting, so their encouragement is
transmitted to the other people.
But in this city are found the most important
cultural areas: like historical and natural museums; the biggest library in the
country, where you can study for the university and it is free; the cultural
centers, like the observatory, where you learn interactively . In the center of
Santiago you find many shops, like shops of shoes, of clothes, beauty centers,
retails; and places where you can eat something good, like shops of ice cream,
restaurants, and a lot of places where is sold junk food. The most important
centers of study of the country are found there, like high schools, colleges,
and universities of the state or privates. Some of them are the best of the
country, so a lot of students migrate to this city for a best future.
This city
have a seriously problems with the pollution, because this city is on a valley,
so the circulation of the air currents is not very effective, and the amount of
cars is bigger. Also, the urban expansion reduces the “green areas”, being a
contribution to the rising of the temperatures.
Dear Catherine,
ResponderBorrarWord Count: 303. Very Good.
I liked your description of the city, I know your writing needs a better edition, but it is more fluent and natural than before.
Please, pay attention to the following obs.;
… the financial activities, (you can find theIR headquarters), and (the) tourism 2.-also 1.-is developed here…
…(NO The) buses collapse in the (pick) PEAK hours
… In (NO the) winter…
(For being a capital city) (SENTENCE NEEDS REVISION), (NO the) people can work there, but (NO the) stress is (too) MUCH bigger (that) SO (NO the) people lose theIR tolerance and become(s) aggressive.
… so their (encouragement) DISCOURAGEMENT? is transmitted to the other people.
…like (shops of shoes, of clothes) SHOE SHOPS, CLOTHES SHOPS…
… like (shops of ice cream) ICECREAM SHOPS,
…lot of places where 2.-is sold 1.-junk food.
… problems with (NO the) pollution, because this city is (on) IN a valley,…
Cheers,
JC